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Writer’s Showcase

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Type: Satire, Racial Prejudice
From WiP, Bob Vs The Aliens
Scene: The Aliens have just landed and Piper, reporter for the European news site, Socialism Revisited, is in Atlanta conducting a “man-on-the-street” interview with Bob, who was selected because he struck her as an average white man.
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+++An elderly black couple turned to them. They smiled at Piper. She smiled back. “Ignore him,” the man told her. “Bob’s too white to understand what’s really happening here.”
+++“He’s a good boy,” the woman assured her. “Give him some time.”
+++“Hi Mom.”
+++Piper stared at Bob. “Mom?”
+++“I was a surprise.”
+++“Your face is Western European.” Her eyes twinkled.
+++“They love me anyway.”
+++Undaunted, Piper thumbed at the cameraman behind her, “Well, the power’s out again. But our camera still works.”
+++Bob ignored her. “I do understand, Dad,” he answered the old gentleman. “The presence of an Alien species defines all humans as one, right?”
+++Realization came over Piper’s face as if she suddenly sensed the real story here. Signaling the cameraman, she turned to the couple. “Tell me, sir, what was your first reaction when you heard the news?”
+++“White folk are gonna stop looking at me like I’m black.”

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Critique & Comments welcome 🙂
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 We want to see your writing of First Line or Paragraph, Character Introduction, World Building, Backstory, Action Scene, Satire, Humor, Horror, display an Emotion, show a Relationship, or, any Bit Of Writing you’d care to share. (Never more than one page in length, please. Be sure to state the type & book title and introduce the scene.)
Post in our drafts section if you can, or, use our Contact Page to send us your  sample or email it directly to GD (at) Deckard (dot) com.
(Many thanks to Ducky Smith & E.M. Swift-Hook of the SciFi Roundtable for their unwitting contribution of this idea.)

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GD Deckard

Severely beaten as a child by a WWII hero and combat-induced-PTSD stepfather, the author, as a teen, faced the old man down with a shotgun and earned his blessing to join the military at the time Americans were learning about a country called Vietnam. The “lazy, no good son-of-a-bitch” opted out of combat and hard labor by becoming an Air Force medic, stamping out suffering and misery on Freedom’s Frontier at Clark Airbase in S.E. Asia and earning some kind of medal pinned on him personally by then Secretary of the Air Force, Harold Brown, for “Saving lives, etc.” There followed a summer in Europe ending in the first of happy marriages. Then graduation with University Honors, kids worth dying for and a career in business. Life is good. Author, The Phoenix Diary, Penguin, 2015. https://www.barnesandnoble.com/w/the-phoenix-diary-g-d-deckard/1122175645 Founding Member, Writers Co-op. https://WritersCo-op.com Co-Editor, The Rabbit Hole anthologies. https://www.amazon.com/Rabbit-Hole-Weird-Stories/dp/1691225355/ref=sr_1_1 Founder, SciFi Lampoon Magazine. http://scifilampoon.com/ Contributing Editor, A Celebration of Storytelling https://www.amazon.com/Celebration-Storytelling-GD-Deckard/dp/1951716167 Current WIP: Code Blue and Little Deaths, stories from Clark during the Vietnam War. Recipient of the Psi Young award for Creative Biography.

8 responses to “Writer’s Showcase”

  1. mimispeike Avatar
    mimispeike

    Interesting, as always. I see possibilities which I feel need exploring. This is too close to real for me not to wonder. Because, as always, I want to believe. None of these explanations detracts from your point.

    1. Mom had an affair.
    2. Mom had significant white ancestry.
    3. Bob was adopted.

    The statement: “Bob’s too white to understand what’s really happening here” opens many doors as well. His face has given him many advantages, he hasn’t felt the same pain.

    What you have here makes it impossible for me not to speculate.

    This of course is not your story. You’re making a point, a good point, which could be tweaked.

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  2. GD Deckard Avatar
    GD Deckard

    I’ve shown this bit of dialogue to others & received only positive comments. The most analytical comment, from one who would know, is the following.

    If I’m being honest, political correctness junkies generally seem humor deficient. I personally view PC as a logical fallacy – something that prohibits or discourages discussion. I highly doubt PC folks would read this because it’s humor. I find it funny and honest, not racist. My cousin Cindy, who’s basically my black twin, was asked to leave a bar when she and my Dad went out for a beer. It would be nice if the bartender saw her as a person instead of a stereotype… I definitely got that vibe from this passage.

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  3. mimispeike Avatar
    mimispeike

    I do like it, and I like your point. This is a brief moment, and perhaps you do it elsewhere, I think you should work it a bit more.

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    1. GD Deckard Avatar
      GD Deckard

      Thanks, Mimi 🙂

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  4. atthysgage Avatar
    atthysgage

    “I was a surprise.” I like that line.

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  5. curtisbausse Avatar
    curtisbausse

    The satire works very well, I think. There’s a lot going on in just a few lines. ‘They love me anyway’ – excellent!

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  6. Carl E. Reed Avatar
    Carl E. Reed

    GD: Why the capital “A” in the line “The presence of an Alien species defines all humans as one . . .”?

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    1. GD Deckard Avatar
      GD Deckard

      Author’s consistency. Throughout the novel, reference to Old Spice as an Alien (species, as opposed to nationality) is cap’d.

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