Ultimate, July 21, 2023

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The Ultimate Critique

by S.T. Ranscht

Image credit: Jr Korpa, Unsplash

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The Ultimate Outsider Has His Say

by Mimi Speike

Sly’s letter to smug, university-educated scholars,
who will never accept him as their intellectual equal.

Sly is a proponent of Natural Philosophy, which is rapidly giving way to the new method of exacting scientific inquiry. He has gotten himself accepted as one of the letrados, among whom a commentary is circulated, each scholar adding his thoughts, forwarding the chain letter to the next name on the list, the participants unaware that Sylvester Boots, Private Secretary to King Jakome of Haute-Navarre, is a cat.

I have stolen the first two lines verbatim from Margaret Cavendish (1623-1673), called the First Female Scientist. Margaret liked to put her scientific theories into verse! Perhaps she got the idea from Sly, who preceded her by three-quarters of a century. I conclude she was familiar with his work.

The terms Mechanical Men, Experimentals, β€˜lice’ for atoms, are hers. The rest is mine.

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Who knows but in the Brain may dwell little small Fairies; who can tell?
If so, why should not to annoy good sense be their transcendent joy?

How else but that, the Gown-ed Tribe, intent on Progress, dares describe
strange doings: substances combined, spirits distilled, methods refined,
odd instruments to mix and weigh and render Science, so they say,
to solve a puzzle, so they claim. The life force makes a cunning game indeed:
to trap the Vital Spark and violate it β€” what a lark! β€” 
by probing mysteries bethought to confer wisdom. 

All for naught are such pretensions. Never can 
mankind be the custodian to secrets of such grave import. 
It is a ludicrous disport.

Mechanical-Men, on the whole, prefer the Atom to the Soul.
To take the measure of the lice is their idea of Paradise.
The minikin world is their glee, for devilish complexity.

Experimentals: Your method, your core conception, fine and good.
Hypotheses drawn from a cause are parsed, and distilled into laws
derived from stringently-culled fact and computationals exact.

My beef with your rigid approach is this: pure logic fails to broach
the chasm between motes in flux and consciousness, the very crux of Being.
You folks tinker. I am fascinated more by why we are who we are.1  
I prefer to wonder, ponder, and infer.

Sensitive Matter2 is the glue which binds creation, in my view.
I posit that it doth pervade the Cosmos, down to a grass-blade.
Your vision of the world is bleak. Your misconceptions β€” I shall speak
straight from the heart, as I am known to do, they chill me to the bone.

Nature, inert? Nay, not a bit. In fact, the very opposite.
We creatures, are we chattels mere, that man is born to domineer?3
The vile β€˜Great Chain’ pish-tosh, what rot!4 You may endorse it. I do not.

Do I so lack lucidity, that I seek an epiphany 
of ones without a doubt, astute, and proud, of parts, and wide repute?

I do. I have the brass to try, though even I can’t justifyΒ 
a poke at the great hornet’s nest of scholarship, so to molestΒ 
the bumble-brains bestowed therein. Just what do I expect to win?

The most of you, I understand, dismiss my ravings out of hand. 
A few of you will write me, then I’ll never hear from you again. 
Some lunatic or other might prick up his ears and see the light. 
From my best word-work do I earn a pathetically poor return.

Fine! Tout your triumphs. Do not fail to slam your rivals, to assail
the hordes of hacks and hucksters who would line their pockets, unlike you. 
Your impulse is to help, to heal, to teach. In short, the commonweal.

Your heart is pure. Don’t miss a chance to strut, with a slick song and dance: 
sly references to your degrees, and similar inanities. 

Have you smart patrons? Sure, you do. No? Fret not. You’ll invent a few. 
Dropped names, Lord This and Lady That, will peg you an aristocrat yourself. 
Have colleagues to your club. Your swanky parlour shames their pub. 
Stand rounds, often. You may be sure free-flowing beer redeems a boor.

Bear with me here, I’m almost through. I leave you to your barley-brew.
Forgive me if I seem to scold. Do honest work, sirs. Conjure gold.

  1. A talking cat would naturally be more interested in why he, in the history of the world (as far as he knows) has been gifted with his incredible talents.
  2. Sensitive Matter was a principal theory of Cavendish.
  3. In a fit of outrage, Sly gives himself away. Hopefully, no one noticed.
  4. The Great Chain of Being: a medieval religious notion that there is a place for everybody and everybody must keep to his place. Sly abhors that idea, naturally.

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Piece Hat

by SL Randall & S.T. Ranscht

Artwork by SL Randall

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Diversity

by S.T. Ranscht

Photo credit: Henry & Co, Unsplash

19 responses to “Ultimate, July 21, 2023”

  1. Sue Ranscht Avatar

    My thanks ultimately go to all who contribute, read, and comment!

    Liked by 1 person

  2. mimispeike Avatar
    mimispeike

    Sue – Hard to believe, but I guess ‘Ultimate’ stumped several of our usual contributors. All I had to do was conjure a headline. Your next prompt, ‘Vital,’ all I had to do was add a single word to a piece nearly complete.

    You haven’t stumped me yet, and I predict you never will.

    Oh, this is a fun game you have created here.

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  3. Sue Ranscht Avatar

    It tickles me that you find so much fun here, Mimi.

    Liked by 2 people

  4. Sandy Randall Avatar

    Mimi,
    “We creatures, are we chattels mere, that man is born to domineer?3”
    This line where Sly outs himself … Truly back in the day, this could just as easily be attributed to women or slaves or peasants. Throughout history the down trodden reach their level of tolerance, and rise. Its cyclical like a tide. The ‘ultimate’ in human history .. though Sly outs himself, the gentry will attribute it to the peasantry they typically ignore.

    Sue, I love what you’ve done with the Piece Hat!

    I actually had a piece, but like Perry, time was not on my side. It was inspired by The Margarets AI post, and in turn inspired WIP Wednesday .. therefore it will be my first submission there. I hope to return to the fray with Vital! Showcase is a vitally important to me … like a bi-weekly vitamin! lol couldn’t resist!

    Sue, your first piece, Ultimate critique gave me chills. Words are powerful and they can bite and then bite back…

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    1. Sue Ranscht Avatar

      And be bitten off. The pen might be mighty and leave an indelible wound, but the sword may have the might to end the pen with a mortal wound to the penner. Not something Siskel and Ebert ever experienced.

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  5. Mellow Curmudgeon Avatar

    @ Sandy & Sue

    Love the subtle colors and humor.  Guess that [peace] is spelled like [piece] because the brim is pieced together like a quilt.

    @ Sue

    Love the limerick’s dark humor and the haiku’s wry take on diversity.

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    1. Sandy Randall Avatar

      The ‘piece hat’ was born out of a typo … it was meant to be ‘a piece that’ … I missed a few letters in there. Sue and I chuckled over it and the ‘Piece Hat’ was born. I just made a visual out of it. The ‘pieces’ are meant to look like pizza slices with peace pepperoni.

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      1. mimispeike Avatar
        mimispeike

        I’m trying to picture what critter would be sitting below that hat.

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        1. Sandy Randall Avatar

          Oh I’m sure it’s some variety of cat…

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    2. Sue Ranscht Avatar

      The hat’s colors are perfect for pizza, but I tried to retain some elegance by not inserting the word “pizza”, lol.

      Your perceptiveness always makes me grateful, Mel. I feel like I’m on the right track.

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  6. Sue Ranscht Avatar

    Mimi – This reads so smoothly and high-mindedly, it feels like a step up for Sly’s skill at verse. I am particularly fond of the alliteration and energized movement of this: “Fine! Tout your triumphs. Do not fail to slam your rivals, to assail / the hordes of hacks and hucksters who would line their pockets, unlike you. “

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    1. mimispeike Avatar
      mimispeike

      I’ve been working on this verse for easily ten years, likely longer. Every time I look at any of my verse, I pinpoint the weakest area and work on that. Until I no longer find a weakest area. I don’t say I’m at that point here, but I’m close.

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      1. Sue Ranscht Avatar

        Yes, you are!

        Liked by 1 person

  7. Sue Ranscht Avatar

    Sandy – Thank you for the gift of your artwork. The brim did put me in mind of a pizza, but as Mel pointed out, a quilted pizza, lol!

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  8. John Correll Avatar

    Sue, perhaps not intentionally, but your ‘diversity’ seems a fitting memorial to the founder of Dilmah tea, Merrill J. Fernando, who just passed away at 93. Dilmah is to New Zealand, what Lipton is to the US, Punjas is to Fiji, and PG Tips is to the UK. Tea is our Goddess β€” in my household. We have a shrine of about 90 different types. My preferred brew is a standard Twinings English Breakfast. I overindulged on Earl Grey in my youth and had to give it up.

    https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Merrill_J._Fernando

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  9. Sue Ranscht Avatar

    Thanks for sharing the Dilmah story, John. It wasn’t intentional, but I’m honored to have provided a fitting memorial for such a dedicated philanthropist.

    And I’ll be watching for your next Show Case submission!

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  10. mimispeike Avatar
    mimispeike

    Sue: Diversi-tea!

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    1. Sue Ranscht Avatar

      Yay, you! (I figured it would be too obvious for me to spell it that way.) πŸ™‚

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  11. mimispeike Avatar
    mimispeike

    I’ve had a lot of fun with Margaret Cavendish. I’ve used her as a template for Sly’s scientific interests.

    “Aristotle himself would wish he had never been the master of all schools, now to be lectured to, and by a cat” is word for word her remark, except that the original fretted: “and by a woman.”

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